Not bad, I like the title. The body however should be turned a tad more to the camera, need to see both shoulders and that way her neck would not look to unnaturally twisted also (keep the body at about a 45 degree angle to the camera). Women also photograph better with their body turned away from the main light. A bit more ratio also maybe, to flat lit, need some shadows in the nose area to make it a bit more 3D.
Thanks for sharing.
George